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题目是disruptive school students have bad effect on others .they shuold be grouped together and taught separately. agree or dis agree?

It is an inescapable fact that there are some unruly students in school who lead to adverse effect on the their fellow students.Therefoer, some people hold the belief that school should segregate misbehavior students in order to build a sound educational circumstances. However , i do not share thin point of view.

Convincing arguement can be made to support my point of view . To begin with,teaching them seperately may destroy their self-esteem considerably and frustrate them which in return makes them behave more badly and dampen their enthusiam academically.Furthermoer, they are possibly to feel emotional isolated while segregating them from their peers. If these children grew up in such an isolated atmosphere,they would lose communication skills and become antu-social.The most significant point is eductional responsiblity. That is to say,teachers should guide these students right way and instill high moral principles instead of giving up them and send them away.It is universally known that schooling invariably plays a pivotal role in kids' growth and moulding their characters.consequently,  any school and any teacher should not give up any  misbehavoir students.

Admittedly,teaching all kinds of students together  may have a little unfair to the studentswho behave and performance wonderfully.however,on the other side ,this is also a chance  for them to learn how to help others to overcome unruly disruptive behavor.in other words,grouping all the  pupils in a classroom makes themhelp and love each other ,which is also eduction aim.

while it is true that the arguement I disagree can  not hold water, I strongly commit to the notion that schools should not catogerize students according to their behavoir.Giving up any kids is equal to threaten our future .

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richard发表于 2010-7-30 15:30 | 只看该作者

回复 1# sherrie

It is an inescapable fact that there are some unruly students in school that are casting adverse influences on  their fellow students.Therefore, some people hold the belief that school should segregate misbehaviour students in order to build a sound learning environment. However , i do not share thin point of view.

Convincing argument can be made to support my point of view . To begin with,teaching them separately may destroy their self-esteem considerably and frustrate them which in return makes them behave even worse and dampen their enthusiasm in learning.Furthermore, they are possibly to feel emotional isolated while segregating them from their peers. If these children grow up in such an isolated atmosphere,they would lose communication skills and become anti-social.The most significant point is educational responsibility. That is to say,teachers should guide these students right way and install high moral principles instead of giving up them and send them away.It is universally known that schooling invariably plays a pivotal role in kids' growth and moulding their characters.consequently,  any school and any teacher should not give up any  misbehavoir students.

Admittedly,teaching all kinds of students together  may have a little unfair to the studentswho behave and performance wonderfully.however,on the other side ,this is also a chance  for them to learn how to help others to overcome unruly disruptive behavor.in other words,grouping all the  pupils in a classroom makes themhelp and love each other ,which is also eduction aim.

while it is true that the arguement I disagree can  not hold water, I strongly commit to the notion that schools should not catogerize students according to their behavoir.Giving up any kids is equal to threaten our future .

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sherrie发表于 2010-7-30 23:26 | 只看该作者

受益很多　谢谢了

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yours-123发表于 2010-8-2 17:52 | 只看该作者

"If these children grow up in such an isolated atmosphere,they would lose communication skills and become anti-social.The most significant point is educational responsibility.”

老师，我有一个疑问，这个句子是不是应该是虚拟语气，前面的一般过去式，后面是 would+v.

那这里是应该用grew呢，还是grow?

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